Month: June 2019
Weekly Progress Update:
Alright, some of you are following along on Facebook, so this may be repetitive. I finally finished my Book Three map! Now, I just need to re-do the Outline based on the layout.
This process (Map first, then Outline) is atypical for me. Normally, the map is created as I write the book. In this case, Book Three’s plot is extremely dependent on the layout, so map comes first this time.
In other news, beta readers are making progress and should have feedback for me soon. This week I’ll start going through it to slowly work my way toward my second editing run-through.
Writing Prompt: Discomfort
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Brutigarr pushed through the crude iron door and followed the steps downward into his dungeon. With each step, he could feel the air grow colder. As he stood at the end of the row of cells, he gazed at the shivering, naked prisoners, their lips blue from the chill.
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Skirmish (Fangdarr): Enough
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The orc stepped out of the room on unsteady feet, his chest rising quickly from the exertion. After the brutal event had passed, the shroud of fury dissipated from his mind. Fangdarr knew what he had done. He could feel the stench of its immorality rising through his stomach as it tensed. The disapproving glare of his deceased mother hounded him, only adding to his shame.
With new clarity, the orc stared around the room and saw the gory scene he had created. The corpse of a small child—a child!—lay in a pool of her own blood, mixed with the man next to her. Fangdarr felt as if he could hardly remember what had happened. In his enraged state, he had done unimaginable things. Horrid things. The events replayed in his head and he held back tears as he realized just how monstrous he had become.
Then, Raz’ja stepped inside with his wicked grin that only spread wider upon sight of the carnage within. The sensitivities Fangdarr was feeling fled immediately, replaced by a toxic necessity to show no vulnerability. That hurt him more than anything else, knowing that for a brief moment he had felt the painful reality of what he was becoming, only to force it away at the first risk of exposure. All the atrocities he had committed against undeserving victims were simply waved away, denying them the respect they should have been given.
And yet, despite knowing the horror he had wrought, Fangdarr, too, could not help but return Raz’ja’s smile.
Bending low, the orc gripped the man’s ears tightly and placed a heavy foot on the back of his skull. With one quick tug, they came free in his hands. He raised the bloody ears toward his pouch slowly but paused. Without a word, Fangdarr turned and strode back into the other room. Raz’ja tilted his head curiously as the sound of a woman’s whimpers and sobs passed through the house. The troll chieftain grew even more curious as Fangdarr returned to the main room, no longer holding the man’s ears.
Seeing his ally’s puzzled expression, the orc simply stated, “Her kill. Her ears.”
Raz’ja’s brow furrowed in disappointment and for a moment Fangdarr thought they would engage in a conflict then and there. But as quick as it had come, the troll’s scowl turned to humor and he burst into hysterical laughter. Finally catching his breath, Raz’ja patted his own overflowing sack of ears on his belt. “Let’s just hope you have enough,” he responded with deadly certainty.
Fangdarr looked down to his own pouch, blood dripping from the soaked leather as it bulged with the ears of those he had killed. He recalled each and every kill in an instant. “It is enough.”
Writing Prompt: Scam
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Special Rule: This one is about something that happened today. It’s a long story but, simplified, ignorant people can’t be reasoned with.
“Are ye dense?” Tormag grumbled. With a scoff, the dwarf stomped away in disbelief that he had just paid thirty-five gold pieces for a hunk of trash. “Son of an incestuous gnome . . .”
“Nice try, thief!” the inept merchant called to his back, lying to attempt to save face. “Nice try!”
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Skirmish (Bitrayuul): Cleric
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The eerie silence in the cave only worried Theiran more as he listened intently for any sign of life.
“C’mon! Fight, lad!” Shaking the half-orc frantically, the senator hardly noticed the sound of footsteps approaching from behind. By the time the scuffling steps were upon him, Theiran had barely managed to turn around, his weapon loose in his grip from despair. If trolls had wished to seal his fate as well, then so be it.
But as his eyes lifted, it was not the wicked, yellow gaze of trolls he met. Instead, over a dozen dwarves stared at him in disbelief. Tormag, spearheading the troop, rushed forward first and headed straight for his adoptive son. “Bit? Wake up, Bit. We’re here now, lad.”
When no response came, the old commander turned to his friend with a curious expression. “W-what’s wrong with him, Theiran?” Tormag turned back to the half-orc, this time noticing the wounds and answering his own question. Before the senator could even respond, Tormag was already muttering in defiance. “No, no. He can’t be. His blood’s still warm.”
A hand fell upon the dwarf’s shoulder. Tormag looked up to see Theiran’s eyes wet, as his were. “He saved me life. I ain’t even knowed him. I figured I was lost to the trolls, but he came. Yer boy came.”
Though distraught at the consequences of such actions, the commander couldn’t help but force a small smile through his anguish. Aye, that was him, he thought. The one who’d charge into a tunnel of trolls just to save someone he hardly knew. His gaze drifted to Bitrayuul’s petrified face. And it cost him everything . . .
All fell silent. Even the dwarves who had accompanied Tormag on his rescue mission—those who had held naught but discontent for Bitrayuul—held their heads low in respect. And shame. Each endured their self-tormenting thoughts that had they been more open-hearted, perhaps they would have followed the half-orc into the tunnels to save their senator, and spare Bitrayuul’s life in turn.
One such dwarf refused to allow such inactivity to harbor shame any longer. She pushed her way through the group from the rear, drawing confused looks. Though she was suited with a cloth robe lined with iron and a mace still dripping with the blood of trolls, her somber expression turned to steel as she pressed forward.
Kneeling next to Tormag, she inspected Bitrayuul’s wounds. The ancient commander was too lost in his grief to even pay her any heed. Until her hand fell upon his. Their eyes met, and with pure sympathy she stated, “I can save him.”
Tormag sat perplexed, not registering her words. “Y-ye what?” Perhaps he didn’t hear her right? But how could those words have been spoken? He looked down at his son once more, seeing his wounds still slowly oozing blood. Still pumping blood. A flicker. That’s all that remained.
The female dwarf removed her hand from Tormag’s with a smile. As with every other dwarf in that tunnel, none expected to be owing so much to an orcish creature when they rose that morning. Her thick fingers clutched her mace, shaped in the symbol of Bothain. With her free hand, the dwarf gently pressed against Bitrayuul’s most severe wound near his neck.
Moments passed with every dwarf on the tips of their toes in anxiousness. Slowly, the deafening silence was replaced by the female’s low chant. The darkness in the tunnel was driven out by a light irradiating from her palm. At first, no more than a minuscule spark. Then, as her prayer grew, so too did the light. Soon the dwarves were forced to turn their eyes away as the blinding glare became too harsh.
Then, the chanting was halted. And with its cessation the darkness returned. Tormag and the other awed dwarves watched as the female’s hair turned from a deep brown a few shades duller, as if she had aged a hundred years in a single moment. They all had known she was a cleric of Bothain—they were few are far between—yet not even Tormag or Theiran had come to witness their healing in person. For such actions, though a mighty gift, came with a heavy cost, as evidenced by the withering of her appearance.
Before Tormag could even question the magic’s efficacy, he turned his head as Bitrayuul groaned in agony.
Weekly Progress Update:
Hi, hi, hello!
Time is quickly counting down, there is only two weeks left for beta readers to return their feedback – or whatever they were able to complete in the short time frame – so I can begin the second round of edits for Madness.
I’ve been beating myself up pretty hard regarding not starting Book Three. Though, now that I realize just how soon the next round of editing is for Madness, it might not turn out to be so bad. Once the time for editing comes again (July 1st), I’ll be taking my standard writing sessions and replacing them with editing sessions to try to get all the edits done in time. So, I would’ve had to have postponed writing Book Three between July 1st and August 31st anyway. I suppose it’s not the end of the world to start Book Three after that, right?
I managed to get another draft of my Book Three map created. It was quite a complex task – much worse than originally expected. I’ll need to finish it before I can tell if it’ll be suitable or not, but I can already tell that my original outline will need to drastically change to fit the map. That brings me to my next point, which I’ve touched on briefly in the past.
Normally, my process involves building the events first and the map is filled around those events. However, Book Three is much more restrictive and requires a predetermined map in order to effectively accomplish the plot I’m aiming for. This means I need to flip my standard practices and create the map first, then build the outline based on the map’s layout. I can’t say why, you’ll just have to see (sometime in 2020, I would hope).
Due to this severe restriction, many of the concepts I’ve had in the numerous drafts of the map have failed for one reason or another. I needed this to be adjacent to that, but underneath the other, but not near the fourth – which needed to be adjacent to the second. Blah, blah, blah. Just a logistical nightmare. I’m hoping that my most recent draft that I’ve worked on today should suffice. It’s about 90% complete, then comes the time to theorycraft, contemplate, and – unfortunately – revise my outline to suit. It’s a pain in the ass overall, but had I went with my original draft/outline, there would have been so many plot holes that I would’ve smashed my face with a rock. Too many.
There are still quite a bit of plot holes I need to plan for and handle, even with a logistical map, that are created from the plot itself. I have to be extremely careful to not write myself into a corner that ends in a rewrite of half (or all) of the entire story. That’s a quick way to walk away for good.
We’ll see how it all goes. I have two other stories in the series I’d love to get to (and then some), but Book Three stands in the path. I can’t just rush out Book Three and fill it with crap to progress, I want it to be the best it can be. It’s still a plot I think will be thrilling, with high stakes and all the loss I’m hopefully becoming known for. As always, no characters are safe, and the party will be in for one hell of a ride.
Writing Prompt: Illusion
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Fangdarr stared wide-eyed at his surroundings, nought but death expanding to every corner of the room. Beneath him was a resilient and horrifying throne, constructed from the bodies of his friends.
Met with the lifeless gaze of their impaled heads, the orc’s eyes clamped shut. Upon opening, all had faded.
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Skirmish (Cormac): Hesitation
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His heart pounded in his chest, though time seemed to slow. The thundering stomps of the oncoming raiding party grew closer.
Cormac opened his mouth to call out to his son, but his voice caught in his throat. His eyes grew wide in fear as the orcs approached rapidly. Scream, scream! the dwarf scolded himself. But no matter how much he begged, his voice would not come.
“ORI, RUN!” shouted the boy’s mother. Her eyes wore the same terrified expression as her husband, but were twisted with confusion at the lack of his own exclamation.
The boy stared at his parents curiously and his playful smile turned to perplexion. For his mother now beckoned him frantically while his father stood erect as stone, frozen in fear. Leaping from the lowest branch, Ori landed on his feet with ease. It was not until then that he realized the commotion behind him.
Turning to regard the swift shifting of feet, the boy’s gaze met the orcs’. There was no time to flee. Nor even a moment for the crippling fear of what was to come to settle. By the time Ori had turned, he was met with the open maw of one of the raiders, roaring vigorously as his crude weapon swung.
“ORI!” The words that had been locked in Cormac’s throat finally broke free—too late. The guard watched as the sharpened iron blade cleaved through his son’s skull.
Ori’s mother screamed and charged forward for no other reason than instinct. She held no weapon, nor any means of defending herself. In truth, her task seemed pointless as her son’s life had already been claimed. Yet still she ran. Fists balled with naught but desperation and despair, fueled by anger at her husband’s lack of action.
Immobilized once more in his fear, knowing his cemented feet had made no attempt to protect his family, Cormac’s eyes filled with tears as his wife met the same fate as their beloved son.
In mere moments, the calm afternoon walk had turned to tragedy. And the dwarf had simply stood by in his dormancy as it all had transpired. A thousand curses aimed at himself, the self-loathing dwarf remained inactive even as the orcs made their way to him. Their roars fell deaf on his ears. Cormac’s eyes fell upon the blood staining their blades and the corpses of his loved ones.
Then, as if in irony, his mind finally decided to act. He shifted to a defensive stance, his father’s shields tight against his arms in preparation. One last glance found its way to Ori and his mother—a reminder of the result of Cormac’s hesitation.
Eyes still welled with tears, lip quivering in anguish, the dwarf waited. There would be no more hesitation.
Weekly Progress Update:
Hey, hey, slight progress this weekend. I’m slowly chipping away the obstacles blocking Book Three.
Soon I’ll be able to look back at this and forget it ever happened.
. . . Right?
There are some other cool ideas floating around for the Orcblood Legacy series. Unfortunately, Book Three is currently the gatekeeper before those other plans can see light. The sooner I can knock it out, the earlier I can get started on some of the other plans I have.
Until next week!
Writing Prompt: Trail
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Special Rule: It’s been a while, if ever, that I’ve used Elethain as the subject for one of these Prompts. So, he’s today’s victim.
Cursing the tediousness of his task, Elethain pushed his way through the dense brush with a sneer as his once pristine robes collected another stain. As he stepped through the shrubbery, his eyes narrowed. “Finally, almost there,” he muttered before stepping past the foul corpses of a group of ogres.
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Skirmish (Fangdarr): Alone
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Fangdarr felt the sharp sting of the pronged iron as the woman plunged it deep into his abdomen. Momentary bewilderment caused the orc to stare down at the utensil and its wielder.
As the orc’s eyes met hers, she did not shy away. He saw within them the same fire and hatred that he knew lay behind his own. Beneath the furrow of her brow came her piercing gaze, channeling every bit of her sorrow and fury. Determined to bring an end to the monster that killed her child, the woman placed both hands on the makeshift weapon and pressed with all her might.
Fangdarr didn’t wince as the fork sank further into his stomach. His focus lay solely on his attacker, roaring in her rage. For the briefest of moments, the orc came to understand the reality of his actions. He had killed a child. Her child. Split her in twain as if she were no more than a log to split. His fury had blinded him from a horror so real that Fangdarr wondered what else he may have done in his enraged trance.
Is this what it means to be orc? he wondered. Kill without remorse. Bring pain to others. End daughters and sons. Mothers and fathers. Is this the height of our purpose? Suffering?
Pulling out the utensil, the woman plunged it into Fangdarr again in a fit of sorrow, this time into pectoral just above his heart.
With the piercing pain, Fangdarr’s mind cast aside all deeper thoughts to be replaced by a single, overwhelming truth. I will not fall to an unnamed human.
As quick as it had subsided, the orc’s blind rage returned. The outrage and anguish previously in the woman’s eyes turned to fear as their gazes met once more, knowing that she had missed her opportunity to avenge her child. She pulled out the fork and aimed to plunge it into Fangdarr again. The flesh the woman expected to meet never came. Instead, she felt the monstrous beast’s hand wrapped around her forearm.
Knowing she had failed, the woman wailed in her anguish. The few eyes of the surviving onlookers hidden in the room watched her in silence, too afraid to move against the invader as she had. She looked to her child for strength, as if her fury would be enough to break past the orc’s hold. Her free arm tried to lash out but was caught as well. Next her feet, kicking out with wild abandon in desperate attempt to disable the orc. Nothing worked. Her rage slipped away and she called out to her daughter with a dozen apologies.
The woman’s wails only grew louder as Fangdarr carried her to the next room. She begged those hidden for aid. But they only waited, hoping their window of opportunity would present itself at her expense. Seeing her friends hide caused the woman to thrash, shouting curses between her sobs. Her resistance only spurred the orc more, driven by dominating lust and power. The blindness of his state sifted out any thoughts detrimental to his course of action, save for one.
Is this what it means to be orc?
In a blink, the thought had vanished. Fangdarr squeezed through a small doorway as his victim sobbed profusely. Driven by an urge common among his kind, the orc stared into her eyes and she knew her fate. She watched as those who had remained concealed in the shadows took their chance to flee. None turned to save her. Not even a moment of hesitation. Her eyes closed as the unbearable pain began and she knew she would be forced to bear it all alone.
Weekly Progress Update:
Yay, minor progress towards Book Three!
It wasn’t much. I didn’t really do anything this weekend except get some details organized on Book Three that were locking me up. I still have more to sort through, but I think I’ve found out what I need to do which makes me happy.
I was planning on doing more today – and still might – but it’s getting late in the day. This weekend has been one of those where I’m just in a weird mood and don’t want to do anything (which is odd, considering it’s the first weekend I’ve accomplished anything, even if minor).
I have some things I’m considering regarding future books, new Skirmish characters, and other ideas. I had considered doing a small Poll on Facebook, but you can only present two options which seems rather pointless. So, I’ll just keep stewing on those ideas for a bit until I reach a conclusion.
That’s all for this week!